Hey sir...listening now so i can comment in almost-real time.
Opening drum pattern is a little basic, and then the tempo changes and you settle into a 4-4 kick. The bloopy keyboard pattern is very busy, and at times seems out-of synch with the kick. Not sure about the abrupt ending, either.
Seems like you've got the bones of a fun song, sort of in the vein of "rez". I'd add some more layers (maybe a nice bassline, some more drums in addition to the splashy hi-hat and kickdrum) and work on the melody? Just my opinion, though. If your intent was just to make a short, loop-driven track, that's totally fine, too! thanks for sharing
