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Originally Posted by Peter
I wrote some lyrics for my latest track (which will soon be available online probably) and was wondering what people thought... enjoy (?)
Riding on Empty
Section 1
Riding on empty baby
Climbing the stairway maybe
You can find
Yourself.
Search in the broken shards
Look for a fallen star
Amidst
The ruin.
Riding on empty shards
Climbing the stairway star
Amidst
Yourself.
Search in the broken baby
Look for a fallen maybe
You can find
The ruin.
Section 2
Smoke in the forest
Fire on the underground
Dog bark girl sing happily
Down and down and down.
(repeat)
Section 3
robo dog dream dog bathroom floor dog
deliver the goods and youll be a happy dog
shadow smoke dread smoke lock the door smoke
a little bag of goodies on the dubside smoke
Any feedback (I realise it kinda needs the music though...)
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I think they're pretty good lyrics, BUT section 3 makes me think too much of Born Slippy. I'm not saying you should change that, but maybe you could be a little more original? Although, that sounds weird, because overall, the lyrics are pretty original and I would be interested in hearing it with the music.